14 Comments
User's avatar
Chafic LaRochelle's avatar

First to comment.

Barnes's avatar

First to comment.

Will G.'s avatar

First to comment.

Ani Beeler's avatar

I wasn't prepared for that ending at all! I'm going to be chewing on that all day. "Old Cray couldn’t get through a sentence without saying calf." cracked me up. This is atmospheric & lyrical writing; I so enjoyed getting to read it.

Spam Sullivan's avatar

This is phenomenal writing man, very earthy and pure and symbolic. I feel like this is a story I would come across in an old book caked with mud.

Chafic LaRochelle's avatar

Hahah Spam! I love that visual. Maybe it features its very own curse too! Oh well—can’t unread it now!

Matthew E Meurer's avatar

To find out the decision they came to, pushed me to slow down and take in every line. And it was worth it!

Chafic LaRochelle's avatar

Man, I love to hear that. I feel like the advantage of flash fiction is it’s so short it that readers feel less rushed to finish it. Thanks so much for reading.

Micah Kimber's avatar

your use of alliteration is *chef's kiss* delightful. write everything like poetry and you'll never fail to strike a chord.

Chafic LaRochelle's avatar

Thank you, Micah :)

Rivers + Robots's avatar

First to vomit.

Anyway. Visual from start to finish. I very much enjoyed your super literal interpretation of the prompt.

Chafic LaRochelle's avatar

Please collect a 10mL sample of the vomit and seal it in a glass vile. Store in a cool, dark place, then ship it by FedEx Express to the nearest literary journal. Thank you for reading, RiverBot.

Rivers + Robots's avatar

I was caught up in the moment, being rhyme-y and silly. Thank you for responding with silliness. Your writing is top shelf.

Chafic LaRochelle's avatar

More silliness—never stop! Thank you for reading as always.